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In the future, students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying at traditional schools. Which would you prefer? Use reasons and specific details to explain your choice

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In my opinion, I prefer to study at traditional schools because of three reasons: discipline, health, and socialization.
Firstly
, learning in school, students have to obey the settled rules.
For example
, students have to wake up early to go to school on time
otherwise
 they will be punished by their teachers. They
also
 learn how to discipline themselves by attending classes with regularly scheduled hours, paying attention to the lessons and having to meet deadlines to hand in their homework.
Secondly
, going to
schools
Suggestion
school
 for studying ensure you a
more healthy
Suggestion
healthier
 body than the one that studies at home. While you are going to school, on foot, by bicycle or even on the bus, you are doing exercise.
In contrast
, when students study at home, they will sit in front of a computer all day that may harm their's eyes.
Finally
, students can participate in social activities that will be beneficial for their future life.
For instance
, teachers may give students a class assignment and they will have the opportunity to discuss and exchange their knowledge with each other. In conclusion, I do believe that studying at traditional schools is still the best way for people to learn.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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