The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to  adult fish.
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The diagram illustrates the stages in the life of the
salmon
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, from birth to maturity.
It is clear that
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there are six* main stages as the
salmon
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develops from egg to mature adult. We can
also
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see that
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spend time in three distinct locations during the cycle, moving from river to estuary to ocean and
then
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back upstream.
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begin their lives in rivers where the adult fish lay and incubate their eggs. After emerging from eggs, the young
salmon
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spend the next stage of their lives being reared in freshwater areas.
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, at some point in their development, the fish swim downstream to river estuaries where rearing continues.
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, where they eventually become fully grown adults.
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, the adult fish travel back upstream to spawning areas of rivers; here they reproduce and lay their eggs, and the life cycle begins anew.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Life cycle
  • Salmon
  • Spawn
  • Egg
  • Alevin
  • Fry
  • Parr
  • Smolt
  • Freshwater
  • Saltwater
  • Adaptation
  • Physiological changes
  • Habitat
  • Predators
  • Survival
  • Ecosystem
  • Migratory patterns
  • Reproductive cycle
  • Environmental factors
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