Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. Identify the possible causes of this trend, and propose some solutions you think would be effective.

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It seems that in recent years, teenagers tend to commit
felony
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very often in many nations. The underlying factors for
such
situations may be numerous for which there are multiple solutions are provided.
To begin
with the causes for
this
unfortunate condition,
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vary from family background to
education
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an education
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system that played a major role
during
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the
children
brought up. Depending on
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family
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economic situation, whether they are economically stable or not,
children
are prone to violate certain rules in order to meet their daily needs. When it comes to
education
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system, based on how severe punishments they received in schools for their misconduct, students might have ignored the values of being kind and good to fellow humans.
In addition
to it, some teenagers have
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tendency to develop certain bad habits like drug abuse under bad influence.
Such
cases appear in
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families where both parents are busy working individuals and there is no one to monitor them. Considering the possible solutions,
firstly
, parents should never neglect their
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children
upbringing. It is essential for them to monitor every step of their kid’s life regarding the matters of their friends, social media and influences that their
children
are falling under.
Secondly
, schools
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second
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for
children
,
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management should consider the feelings of students being hurt
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the hard punishments they are enforcing on kids.
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a way younger generation of many nations would learn to differentiate between good and bad from
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age. In the end, it is logical
to conclude
that the role of family and education system plays a crucial role in influencing the future generation to be
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responsible
citizen
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of
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or
a
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heinous convicted
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.

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Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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