In some societies, the number of crime committed by teenager is growing. Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crime should receive adult punishment. To what extend do you agree?

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Owing to a problem which is a growing number of major crimes committed by teenagers, some people think that the key to solving

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issue is to have

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the same punishment

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as adults. In my opinion, I completely agree that

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is the best way to tackle the issue of high

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rates in adolescence. With regards to the

punishment

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, the government should treat every criminal in a same way, regardless of their age

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and should not give any different treatment because of their young age.

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, In some countries the capital

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for rape is

death sentence

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a death sentence

, if

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brutal

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is committed by any

teenagers they

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teenagers, they

should get the same

punishment

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of death sentence, since the sincerity of the

crime

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is same. Another point to consider is

that having same

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having that same

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for everyone will probably set an example for others. Nowadays, it has become a trend in

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the younger generation

to follow each other and they commit minor crimes any get away with it because of

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people in general

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have become more resilient and do not think twice before committing any major

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like murder. By sentencing them with

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the same punishment

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as adults for these major crimes would probably

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make or cause to be or to become

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fear in others and they would think twice before

commiting

perform an act, usually with a negative connotation

committing

any

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. In conclusion, to deal with an increasing

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rate in teenagers, the government should implement some strict rules and punish everyone with same

punishment

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is the most effective way to decrease teenage

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In some societies, the number of crime committed by teenager is growing. Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crime should receive adult punishment. To what extend do you agree?

Fully explain your ideas

number of children who drop the school is increasing in some countries.what are the reasons and solutions to overcome this problem.

Percantage of mobile phones owners using various mobile features in 2006 2008 and 2010

Many things that use to be done in the home by hand are now being done by the machines. Does this development bring more advantage or disadvantage.

Governments give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.