“Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion”

Nowadays, there are many kinds of sports playing in world,
however
, few of them are really dangerous to play and due to
this
reason some people believe that, the government should ban, but others claim that, nobody should
interfere people’s
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interfere with people’s
interfere in people’s
life. In
this
essay, I am going to demonstrate
pros
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the pros
and cons of
this
phenomenon On the one hand, supporters of
idea severely
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idea, severely
required that, the government must
imposed
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impose
bans and restricted to dangerous sports.
Firstly
, playing these extreme sports can cause some serious injuries and
also
could lead to death. More specifically, games
such
as boxing, racing, and others could be very dangerous since they are extremely risky and due to the a single mistake, brain cells of competitors could be damaged and they can live crippled in their rest of life.
Besides
this
, in some cases, spectators can
also
be injured in
this
type of competition.
For example
: 2 years ago, in the Monaco grand prix a race car brakes and due to the
this
accident car crushed with spectators.
On the other hand
, no one could interfere people’s private life since everybody can decide for themselves whether to take part in a number of dangerous non-sport activities. Due to the human nature, mankind
always have
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always has
has always had
an inclination
to
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for
of
doing prohibited things and it
is nearly impossible deter
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is nearly impossible deterring
is nearly impossible deterred
has nearly impossible deterred
deters nearly impossible
is nearly impossible to deter
is nearly impossible deter
it. Except
this
, in
this
century, due to the advancements of technology, dangerous activities are more safe, in comparison with past because so many equipment are available for providing people with security. In my opinion, I reckon that
although
many risks have been anticipated but there are more advantages when the government let people practice what they like

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