Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

It is true that the
world
has become a global village and the countries are more similar
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
ever before, while
this
has several disadvantages to
locat
distribute according to a plan or set apart for a special purpose
allocate
lacked
culture
, I believe that overall the benefits are more
signigicant
important in effect or meaning
significant
. Admittedly, the
culture
is
diminshing
becoming smaller or less or appearing to do so
diminishing
due to
this
development. The kids and teenagers ate more attracted towards
westran
a film about life in the western United States during the period of exploration and development
Western
western
culturem
a particular society at a particular time and place
culture
the more they adopting
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
culture
there own
culture
is
vanshing
a sudden or mysterious disappearance
vanishing
. To illustrate
this
, during the
last
decade it
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decade, it
is often seen that the cultural dress is only
weared
affected by wear; damaged by long use
worn
word
on festivals some even do not wear it on the festivals
also
.
However
,
on the other hand
, there are several advantages which can be put forward to support
this
development. The two biggest
advantages according
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advantages, according
to me are:
Firstly
, the more chances of buying products of other countries means more understanding of
culture
and more
unitedness
of the
world
,
hence
there would be less conflicts in the name of race and colour.
when
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When
every body
all people
everybody
gets a chance to use same things the
sence
a general conscious awareness
sense
of equal-ness is adopted.
For example
, when Turkey adopted the
westren
relating to or characteristic of the western parts of the world or the West as opposed to the eastern or oriental parts
western
Western
style they got more
familier
well known or easily recognized
familiar
and friendly to each other.
Secondly
,
this
development
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developer
saved a huge amount of recourses and lives
also
. The same medicine and
machienes
any mechanical or electrical device that transmits or modifies energy to perform or assist in the performance of human tasks
machines
are available
every where
to or in any or all places
everywhere
in the
world
. So, no need to
trevel
change location; move, travel, or proceed, also metaphorically
travel
for operations and medical treatments. To exemplify
this
, in Pakistan many cancer patients have been saved
eversince
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ever since
imported
chemothrapy
the use of chemical agents to treat or control disease (or mental illness)
chemotherapy
medicines are available. In conclusion,
although
the growth of
world
Suggestion
the world
into a global village has a few drawbacks, it is more likely to have enormous impacts on people and resources.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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