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Band 7.5

Write a letter to a friend who worked at your previous company. You have moved to a new job in a new city. • describe your city • describe your job • describe the arrangements for him to visit you Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear .....,

#friend #company #job #city #arrangements #visit #addresses
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Dear David, I hope
this
 letter finds you in good health. I am writing
this
 letter about moving to a new
city
due to
 my new job. As you know, I have been living in Chittagong since 2022, and I recently moved to Dhaka,
a
Correct article usage
the
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 capital
city
 of Bangladesh.
Although
,
this
city
 is densely populated it is well-organised. There are many renowned hospitals, and educational institutions available
along with
 modern public transportation systems. I have joined a multinational company as a human resources manager, where my prime responsibilities are to look after the
overall
 factory well-being
as well as
 administration.
This
 company provides state-of-the-art facilities for their employees including a flexible working environment.
Moreover
, I would like to invite you to pay a visit to my new
city
 so that we can explore the natural beauty of
this
city
 and entertainment in different places. Please come at least two days in advance as I have already made the necessary arrangements for your stay during
this
 visit. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon regarding
this
 matter. All the best. Faisal
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coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured and each paragraph covers a different aspect as required by the prompt. To further improve, consider varying your sentence structures to add complexity and interest.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriately informal and friendly, fitting the context of writing to a friend.
task achievement
You have effectively addressed all three bullet points from the prompt. However, for a higher score, you could provide more detailed descriptions and personal reflections to make your letter engaging.
task achievement
The tone is suitable for an informal letter to a friend. For further improvement, consider using more varied and idiomatic expressions to make your writing more natural.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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