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The price of rail travel in some countries increases annually while average incomes remain relatively stable. This causes a problem for many people who rely on trains for travelling to work. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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the
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The
 effectiveness of using solar
energy
 is debatable.
however
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However
, many believe that it is much more effective than any other available
resources whereas
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resources, whereas
, few believe that it does have disadvantages.
this
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This
 essay will outline both the positive and negative effects of using solar
energy
 as a source for producing electricity.
to
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To
 begin with, the main advantage of using solar power is that it is
renewable
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a renewable energy
energy
 which has no extinct to its availability.
additionally
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Additionally
, It can be used for the whole of our life as a one-time investment.
for
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For
 example, we don't need to pay for current if once we have a setup of solar
energy
,
additionally
, it is eco-friendly which causes no harm to nature and can
also
 we can have a set up at anywhere like a terrace
on
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of
 the house,
backyard
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the backyard
 of the building,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
on
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On
 the other hand, the negative consequences are, it cannot be used in all seasons or every time or everywhere likely if it is a rainy or winter
seasons it
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seasons, it
 would be a tough time of producing
energy
 and in few places most of the time it showers snows or it is very cold to use the solar source for power.
Secondly
, it is too costly to set up a solar plant,
as a result
, it cannot be afforded by many people. To conclude, it has both positive and negative outcomes of using solar as a resource of
energy but
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energy, but
 it can be used to an extent to save a few amounts and non-renewable sources.
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