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You had a good meal in a local restaurant with your family. Write a letter to the newspaper to tell them about it, describe the meal you had, and why you think the restaurant is worth visiting

#restaurant #newspaper
Dear Sir I am a
long standing
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 member of our local community and I am writing a recommendation to other citizens for one of our fine neighbourhood dining establishments; The Lone Star Café. There were many impressive attributes
which
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 struck me upon my entrance,
such
 as the décor and ambience. I particularly enjoyed the laid back attitude of the place. But for my
mind
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 it was the service along with the size and quality of the portions that
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 most memorable. The service was professional yet intimate, and along with the sheer quantity of the dishes served, motivated me to pass on my recommendation. I enjoyed a steak of mammoth proportions and a giant, fresh, crisp salad accompanied by a selection of appropriately selected seasonal vegetables. The piece de resistance,
however
, was the rich Black Forest gateau served as dessert –and all for a reasonable price. I hope after reading
this
, potential customers will frequent
this
 diner – Bon appetite. Yours truly

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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