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Even though globalization has some very positive effects, we cant forget its negative effects. What are the disadvantages and advantages of globalization?

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Globalization is the integrations of different Countries all over the globe, and with the aid of modern technology everything can be possible and it affects the nations in a positive ways. The writer will discuss below about the merits and demerits followed by a conclusion. To start with, we cannot deny that it is beneficial not only for the well developed Countries but
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 for the developing nations
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 as the Philippines, India, Thailand and Malaysia. One of the major advantages of globalization is that products can be exported to the other nations and its mean that flock of income will return to the government. Apart from that, other equipments that are essential like medical equipments, and machines using for security purposes can be purchased in the other state.
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, highly skilled individual can able to work in exchange for a better salary.
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, Philippines usually purchased essential items for the infrastructure, business and for the government in Russia and China because of their advancement when it comes to technology. Thereby, both can benefit from each other.
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, there are few advantages too. In fact, it is a root of unequality.
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, Saudi Arabia, America and Australia, which are known to be wealthy. Their governments tend to hire highly skilled workers from the poor state
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 as Egypt and India and their income are lower compared to the local hired. It is a reason why it leads to inequality and discrimination. To recapitulate, I believe that globalization is a one way to facilitate the needs of each nation, we cannot deny that there are few negative effects, but there are some measures to address the issues,
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 the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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