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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology

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According to some people it is mandatory for students studying which they prefer, while others believe that students had better to course other fields' subjects which is important for their future life. I would rather that it is better to inquire whatever they want. People's belief of studying mere subjects which are better for students' future may be reasonable.
For instance
, studying technology and to explore new thing in order to facilitate human beings' works or studying medicine in order to save a human's life and help them.
In addition
, as
such
 kind of fields' income is advanced, people prefer
this
 option. I think that it is the most appealing side of it which many of people have a common belief.
Nevertheless studying
Accept comma addition
Nevertheless, studying
 the subject (profession) which learners want is more advantageous than the opposite. The reason of it is being of the students' enthusiasm. When they are enthusiastic they can concentrate on their studies easily, even the lecture is hard. One more benefit of
this
 option is that learners will not feel like under the pressure as it exists in the other choice. It is sensible when students are really into learning whatever they want. Actually, it depends on learners' comprehension skills that they should exercise mathematical work or literary work. As everyone knows, all students have different capabilities and various thoughts, it is more efficient to give them more opportunities in order to choose the fields themselves which they prefer, not parents or another one. In
this
 way they not only will learn whatever they like, but
also
 they will understand all details perfectly and quickly.
Furthermore
, results of
this
 option could be much more better rather than the opposite one, according to these reasons. In conclusion, I believe that gaining knowledge of the students that they want which field is better is much more effective than the other one.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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