Introduction
YOUNG GENERATION ARE TAUGHT TO BE THE
NEXT
LEADERS IN THE FUTURE. SPENDING THEIR SPARE HOURS IN THE MALL ARE TAUGHT BY SOME TO BE BENEFICIAL TO THEM, Linking Words
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, OTHER PEOPLE BELIEVES THAT HAVE HAD DETRIMENTAL EFFECT TO THEM AND TO THE COMMNUNITY AS WELL. THE WRITER IS STRONGLY AGREES FOR THE LATTER VIEW AND THE REASONS WILL EXPLAIN BELOW FALLOWED BY A CONCLUSION.Linking Words
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TO BEGIN
WITH, YOUNG ONES ARE EXPECTED TO STUDY HARD DURING SCHOOL HOURS TO CREATE A SUSTANABLE LIFE FOR THEIR FUTURE. IN ORDER TO ATTAIN Linking Words
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SUCH
KIND OF LIFE, THEY SHOULD EXERT VIGOROUS EFFORT. THEY ARE EXPECTED TO SPEND MOST OF THEIR DAYS IN SCHOOL DOING SCHOOL ACTIVITIES AND ACADEMIC CLASSES WHICH IS ESSENTIAL FOR THEM. UTILIZING THEIR FREE TIME IN STUDYING THEIR LESSONS AT HOME ARE ADVISABLE. Linking Words
ALTHOUGH
, GOING TO THE MALLS SOMETIME FOR PURCHASING SOME ITEMS, EATING IN THE MALL TOGETHER WITH THEIR LOVE ONES IS CONSIDERED AND CRUCIAL.Linking Words
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HOWEVER
, INVESTING SPARE HOURS IN THE SHOPPING MALLS, AND INDULGING IN THE ACTIVITIES THAT ARE TAUGHT TO HAVE NEGATIVE IMPACT ON THEIR STUDIES, Linking Words
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AS ONLINE GAMES THAT ARE INCREDIBLYPOPULAR NOWADAYS ARE ABSOLUTELY NOT BENEFICIAL AND HAVE HAD A HUGE DRAWBACK. PLENTY OF YOUNG ONES IN Linking Words
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MODERN DAYS LOST THEIR CONCENTRATION ON THIEIR STUDIES AND SPEND MOST OF THE TIME PLAYING ONLINE GAMES IN THE MALLS PARTICULARLY MALE STUDENTS. Linking Words
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, MALLS HAVE HUGE OF OPPORTUNITIES TO OFFER AND CAN CAUSE TEMPTATIONS Linking Words
SUCH
AS PURCHASING THINGS, WHICH IS NOT NECESSARY AND CONSIDERED TO BE WASTE OF MONEY.Linking Words
Conclusion
TO CONCLUDE,
ALTHOUGH
IT IS NOT FORBIDDEN TO SPEND EXTRA HOURS IN THE MALL, Linking Words
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HOWEVER I
BELIEVE THAT YOUNG GENERATION SHOULD SPEND LESS AND SPEND MORE TIME IN THE STUDIES.Accept comma addition
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