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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Many people believe that a significant environmental problem at the present time is the decreased population of some species and plants on our planet.
However
, are those who suppose
that is
 environmental problems.
Firstly
,
this
 essay will discuss serious problems as endangered plants and animals in reason human influence on it, and
secondly
, it will
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 that pollution from vehicles and industrial area are causing a severe problem to the
environment
. On the one hand, some people think that the effect of animals’ life can be severe, especially for animals and plants that are endangered today. It could lead to a number of problems
such
 as poaching, habitat loss, and food chain disruption in the long run. These effects tend to have an especially on
very poorest
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the very poorest
 in society due to the least resources for counting environmental effects. Rarely do people realize the consequences of human impact on the
environment
in particular
 species plants and animals.
For example
, the Asia tiger population decrease due to poaching by a human to receive financial gains.
On the other hand
, those who assume that the essential environmental problem and could lead to many factors,
such
 as emissions from cars, factories, or other human activities.
Moreover
, many developing countries are becoming industrialized, and the number of factories is growing worldwide.
As a result
, both vehicles and industrial complexes produce emissions, and exhaust fumes on the
environment
 are intensive. If society were not to control the emissions of
factories
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the factories
, we would obtain ecological catastrophe on our planet soon in the future.
For instance
, in Europe, some factures established filtration and processing in the industrial complexes to decline pollutions that are viable options
to
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in
 a safe
environment
 in that area. In conclusion, I am firmly convinced that people should introduce their initiative to support for solving issues related to the
environment
 of our planet and endanger some spaces and plants.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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