The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011
The bar graph presents the
quantity
of rentals and sales Change the quantifier
number
in
various Change preposition
of
kind
of film annually. Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
Moreover
, the chart shows the information cleerly
between 2002 and 2011.
As can be seen, the number of Correct your spelling
clearly
rental
started at the highest number at 175,000 units in 2002. Change to a plural noun
rentals
On the other hand
, the consumer who prefer
to rent decrease slightly every year. Change the verb form
prefers
Finally
, in 2011, the store got income from rentals less
than Correct quantifier usage
apply
2002
4 times. Change preposition
in 2002
In addition
, in 2002 people started to buy DVD
, which began at 40,000 units per year. Increasing rapidly, Fix the agreement mistake
DVDs
demand
Add an article
the demand
of
Change preposition
for
DVD
reached Fix the agreement mistake
DVDs
the
peak in 2007, which was more valuable than every kind of Change the word
its
films
. Fix the agreement mistake
film
On the contrary
, the number of people favoring
Change the spelling
favouring
DVD
decreased slightly from 2008 to 2011.
Fix the agreement mistake
DVDs
In contrast
, having the identical pattern with the rentals, VHS started with smaller at the beginning of the figure, which was 70,000 units. In addition
, VHS sales disappeared after 2005. Furthermore
, customers began to interested
in Blu-ray Add a missing verb
be interested
film
in 2007 and Fix the agreement mistake
films
increase
slightly every year.Correct pronoun usage
this increase
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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