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Tourism is becoming increasingly important as a source of revenue to many countries, but its disadvantages should not be overlooked. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Tourism
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 is becoming increasingly important as a source of revenue to many countries, but its disadvantages should not be overlooked. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Tourism
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The tourism industry
industry
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 is an important element to the economy for the benefits it brings and creates more opportunities to many more industries.
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 offers benefits
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 there are some demerits associated with
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 which should not be over looked.
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 essay agrees
tourism
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industry
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 is beneficial to the economy while we minimise the negative effect of the
industry
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60 words) One of the probable of advantages of
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industry
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 is that it
create
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creates
 wide business opportunity to the public. Business become more global due to the emergence of
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.
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, several
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handicraft
handicrafts
 shops are increased due to
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, as most of the customers are foreign nationalities which leads to pave the way to online
handi-craft
a work produced by hand labor
handicraft
handicrafts
handcraft
 shop.
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 to that it creates more job opportunities among the public,
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 which leads to more growth in national income.
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89 words) Though there are many benefits associated with
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tourism
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the tourism industry
industry
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, there are some demerits linked
with
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to
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industry
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. One of the main limitations of
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industry
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 is that it may lead to illegal business activities as many of the tourists are addicted to some stimulant products.
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, nowadays communities are facing chronic diseases
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 as cancer, heart attack due to the constant use of intoxicating products and
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the number
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 of illegal shops which are selling other stimulant products have been increased in recent days.
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 to that it may creates waste management issues.
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80 words) In conclusion,
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 is one of
best
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the best
 source of income generation tools while we consider the appropriate actions against
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 negative effects. (30 words)

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