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In contemporary society, everyone should have equal opportunities in education. Therefore, universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many educators today feel pressure to teach to the test and emphasise academic subjects over more practical ones. In my opinion,
this
 approach is overtly short-sighted and practical skills, play an important role in a well-rounded education. Those who support a singular focus on academics can point to its tangible outcome in higher test scores. A good example of
this
 would be accelerating academic progress at inner city schools. There have been numerous reforms in the
last
 several decades to help the poorest performing districts catch up. The results have been uneven at times, but overall more students from impoverished or troubled backgrounds can now go to college, often being the
first
 person in their family to do so. Passing exams have the very real benefit of giving them opportunities outside of menial work and, in the most extreme cases, crime. Though there might be a case for overemphasis on academics in select districts, learning practical skills is an important part of becoming an all around person. Those who possess certain skills,
such
 as a sharp memory and logical thinking, will perform better in academics like math and physics.
This
 means that these skills are rewarded and may become over-developed at the expense of skills related to practical work
such
 as spatial thinking and multi-tasking. Graduates who know how to please their teachers and get good grades in academic subjects will find themselves lacking in real world skills. Adding in practical skills goes a long way towards making
this
 a reality. In conclusion, the argument for academics only applies to niche segments of society and learning practical skills has tremendous benefits. Schools should find ways to balance both despite external pressure from the government and parents for the reductive measure of higher marks
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Equal opportunities
  • Gender equality
  • Stereotypes
  • Diverse
  • Gender disparity
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, and Mathematics)
  • Humanities
  • Quotas
  • Reverse discrimination
  • Meritocracy
  • Tokenism
  • Workforce
  • Leadership roles
  • Aptitude-based
  • Scholarships
  • Economic growth
  • Innovation
  • Social stability
  • Comparative analysis
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