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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university
The majority of high school graduates seek a university
education
.
Although
 some universities are private, most of them are for free.
However
, I consider poor people have more difficulty accessing higher
education
 than those who have money.
First
 of all, it should be said that not everyone has the same preparation. Private schools have better
education
 than most public schools, which gives students with money an advantage some poor students do not have.
Additionally
, most careers
such
 as medicine or engineering require extra studies in order to pass an admission exam.
For instance
, institutes or tutors charge as much as AR$ 80.000 for an admission exam.
This
 sets a huge difference for those who can pay
this
 tuition and those who can not.
Furthermore
, not all careers are available in public universities. Careers
such
 as International Relationships are only available in universities like San Pablo or UNSTA in Tucumán. Each has an admission exam for which you have to pay an absurd bill.
In addition
, they charge each student a monthly fee, which is out of reach for everyone who does not have a stable economic situation. Should poor students decide to study any career only available in a private university, it is almost certain they will have to move to another city in search of a more affordable option, or change their mind and study something else. All in all, it appears to me that having cash gives any student a huge advantage when it comes to higher
education
.
This
 is due to the fact that students with economical benefits have access to extra help and options that
otherwise
 would be hard to obtain.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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