Vaccinating children against preventable diseases is not only unnecessary but also dangerous. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Vaccination
has
alaways
at all times; all the time and on every occasion
always
been an issue of debate, Some people think that there is no need of it because it can be detrimental to children.
However
, I completely disagree with the given statement because it can save our
chil
a young person of either sex
child
from many diseases and its
affects
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
are not dangerous. To commence with
,
Accept space
,
there are many valid points
to go
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going
in favour of
vaccination
.
Firstly
,
Accept space
,
it is mandatory to inject medicines to the young ones because it can keep them safe from the upcoming ailments
such
as
measels
an acute and highly contagious viral disease marked by distinct red spots followed by a rash; occurs primarily in children
measles
and chickenpox.
moreover
in addition
Moreover
child's immune system
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the child's immune system
is very weak and they are
vulernable
susceptible to attack
vulnerable
victims of
dieseas
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
disease
in young age. To save them and improve their immunity there is utmost
nessecity
the condition of being essential or indispensable
necessity
to administrate
these injection
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these injections
.
In addition
, these medicines are not dangerous at all because they have proven results and well tested.India is a good example of
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
positive results.
by
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By
using polio
vaccination they
Accept comma addition
vaccination, they
got success to completely eradicate
this
health issue.
Therefore
, these injections are
benefical
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
and does not have any negative impacts.
On the other hand
, some people
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
that
vaccination
is not needed and have ill effects on our upcoming generations due to fact that they are not aware these drugs are
comes
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coming
into usage
afters
happening at a time subsequent to a reference time
after
years of study and testing.
furhermore
in addition
Furthermore
Furhermore
,
Accept space
,
every parent is emotionally attached to their offsprings
anf
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
for them it is hard to see them in pain with injection needle. But it's reasons of injecting are far more beneficial than its minor danger comes with
itsuch
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it such
as mild fever and some rashes. In conclusion
,
Accept space
,
despite some people have different views about
vaccination
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
role is imperative to save
child
Suggestion
a child
the child
against some diseases and cannot be neglected because of a very little risk involve in it.
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