Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discus both these views and give your own opinion.

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That well-known sportsmen should win a bigger salary than people with a different career stirs arguments. Some totally support
this
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,
whereras
on the other hand
whereas
some think sportsmen’s contribution isn’t enough to ensure
such
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a big money. I think only the true contributor to the society can be well paid. The reason why some people support
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argument is that the sportsmen win
reputation
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a reputation
for their country and sacrifice their private life. Once they can shine out on the international sports field,
such
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as
Olympic Games
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the Olympic Games
, they will bring their country power and fame.
For example
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, Deng Yaping the champion of table tennis in
row
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a row
, attracts people overseas to China to learn how to play tennis better.
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, some athletes devote their time on advertising sports ads. Famous brand,
such
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as Nike
hire
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hires
super sports stars to advocate their brands worldwide, which is a wise way to increase sale and reputation.
On the other hand
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, people from other field contributing far more than sportsmen don’t enjoy a decent salary.
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, teachers impart knowledge, shape children’s personality and foster their creativity; doctors work around the clock to save precious lives,
fight
Suggestion
the fight
against disease and care for the helpless. Unfortunately, they are often being thrown behind our minds after their contribution. In China, teachers earn a lot less than sportsmen, especially those teach in the rural area. In short, the huge pay gap in the salaries of sportsmen and people with other
differnt
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
careers is neither fair or balanced
,
Accept space
,
which needs the government to work out efficient policies to narrow. I call on the government to take immediate action to seek the balance in society.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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