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It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

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Some people are born with certain talents and others can be taught is a debatable topic. We could look the both sides and give our opinion.
Firstly
, the people who are born with talent of sports, music etc. cl
aims t
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Claims
hat they get it fo
rm t
a giver or sender
from
heir forefathers and have it in their genes. Obviously they are far ahead from those people who do not have
such
 prestige. Being talented is a GOD gift which could be utilized effectively to get efficient results. We saw the examples of famous sports persons and musicians who belongs to the families of same field experts get an early success than others. Natural Talent ha
ve v
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has
ital importance in every field of life. The training can polish your talent to achieve productivity.
Secondly
, ot
her side o
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the other side
f people cited that nothing is impossible in the
world
. A baby born without any talent can be a successful sports person and musician with hard work. The
world
 is full of examples one of them is Mr. Shahid Afridi a cricketer from Pakistan. He belongs to a Pathan`s family with the occupation of farming in the fields. No one from his fa
mily even k
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family, even
nows the basics of the cr
icket but t
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cricket, but
hat person le
arn t
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learns
he cricket and got the title of “Boom Boom” in the
world
 and still have lot fame. There are many other people having same story who acquire the required skills and exploit their capacity to lead the
world
 in their desired area. In a nu
tshell it i
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nutshell, it
s observed that being talented is not self sufficient there is a need of
p
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for
roper training and hard work to excel in life.
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