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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Noisy students can effect on other classmates. Students making noise ought to gather in a different class. In
this
 essay, I will talk more about
agrees
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agreeing
. Obviously, most of the parents want their children to study in quiet classes rather than noisy.
This
problem maybe
Accept comma addition
problem, maybe
 exists in the most of schools. Gathering students in the different
class maybe
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class, maybe
 hurt their
feeling
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feelings
 because
this
 difference makes them to stop learning. One striking example of solving
this
 problem is
parents
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the parents
. Probably, telling
to
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for
 the parents about
this
 could be very efficient, because family plays an important role in raising children. Separating student’s maybe is practical.
This
 will make more orderly because
teacher
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the teacher
a teacher
teachers
 can
teacher can
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teach, can
teach can
teaches
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teach
 his/her lesson better and students can learn easily. As hypothesized, feel
relax
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relaxed
 during teaching by
teacher
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teachers
the teacher
a teacher
 is
substantial thing
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a substantial thing
 that every of them need it.
For example
, when a person who is teaching should not anything is wacky him/her. Another important thing is, clever students can show their abilities better and it could improve
level
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the level
 of the class. According to specialist, open mind and quit place are very important factors to each
students
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student
 who are studying specially in schools. These two points as mentioned in the text, are the most efficient when you want to learn.
Although
 open mind is more important than anything, without a quiet place approximately it is not possible. As far as
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 am concerned studying in silent place has positive energy. All in all, families take
important part
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an important part
 of their
children
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children's
 lives. Relaxing during teaches is crucial, and gather disobedient students in various
classroom
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classrooms
 can help
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 students.
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