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Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city , while others think that bicycle is better . Discuss both the points and give your opinion.

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Transportation has become a necessary means to live an easy life. It is considered by some people that using cars to commute is the prominent while some believe that
bicycle
 holds more ease. I opine that since it is about travelling in
city area
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the city area
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,
bicycle
 stands as a better alternative.
To begin
 with
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 cars can
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 easy mode of transportation mainly because of two reasons.
Firstly
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 cars can accommodate more than two people and
therefore
 less fuel is consumed.
Secondly it
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Secondly, it
 becomes easier to reach any location which indirectly saves time in
this
 busy world
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 More number of people can travel with more ease and comfort despite any weather conditions.
On the contrary
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,
 travelling through a
bicycle
 has its own benefits
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 one being
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 health. Riding a
bicycle
 keeps blood circulation normal and a person remains fit.
Moreover
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,
bicycle
 emits no gas or smoke leading to zero pollution.
Hence
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,
bicycle
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a bicycle
bicycles
the bicycle
 can be a preferred option if it comes to commuting in the city area. In my opinion
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 using
bicycle
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bicycles
 to travel will help to reduce pollution and
also
 when it comes to one person travelling
bicycle
 is more advisable than
car
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a car
cars
 for a single person commuting. In conclusion
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 those people who think that
bicycle
 should be used can indirectly help to the country's environmental growth.
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