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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good member of society. Others however believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

#people #parents #children #member #society #school #place
The pie chart indicates the main cause of worldwide
land
degradation
 during the 1990s in the
percentage
 scale, while the table
illustrate
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illustrates
reasons
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the reasons
 of
land
degradation
 in three
region
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regions
:
north
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North
 American
,
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,
 Europe and
oceania
a large group of islands in the south Pacific including Melanesia and Micronesia and Polynesia (and sometimes Australasia and the Malay Archipelago)
Oceania
. Overall, over-grazing is the main reason of worldwide
land
degradation
 and it reached 35%. Deforestation and over-cultivation has it reached 30% and 28
% respectively
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%, respectively
, leaving 7% for other reasons. It can be seen from the table that Europe had the biggest
percentage
land
degradation
 which was 23%.
the
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The
 lowest
percentage
 of
land
degradation
 was in
north
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North
 America it reached 5%.In Europe deforestation had a
biggest
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bigger
big
 cause of
land
degradation
, while in north America it has the lowest.
in
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In
 Oceania over-grazing had a highest point of
land
degradation
 it reached 11.3% and in
north
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North
 America the highest
percentage
 of
land
degradation
 is over-cultivation that it reached 3.3%. In conclusion, over-grazing was the main cause of worldwide
degradation
 in 1990s. Europe
percentage
 of
degradation
 was
largest
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the largest
 of all three regions.
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  • role models
  • moral values
  • social norms
  • structured environment
  • cooperation
  • respect
  • communal responsibilities
  • decision-making
  • societal integration
  • consistent messages
  • cultural expectations
  • complementary roles
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