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Some people prefer to live in a house while other feel that living in an apartment has more advantages. Discuss Advantage and disadvantages

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From centuries people used to live in different buildings. Nowadays the most popular are houses and apartments. In general, I truly believe that living in a house has more advantages than disadvantages. Living in a residence, you can really, feel free.
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 is because of the huge space around you. Probably the most important advantage of having a household is its bigger living area. It is not a problem usually to have 3 or 4 bedrooms.
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 most cases there is a backyard where you can organize a BBQ. Own garage is a
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 plus. Living in an apartment often there is not too much space. Apartments with 4 bedrooms are quite rare and very expensive. In
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 case you have to forget about the BBQ. Sometimes going outside is like a trip. And, what is very important, every month there is a fee to pay for living there. Bigger apartment means bigger costs. So it is not profitable to live in a big one; in
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 case it is better to choose a house, especially when you have a big family.
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we used to live in a building with my parents. Available huge space is a big advantage of houses. Now I live in a small flat in Warsaw and I clearly see the differences. The area of my flat is not huge. Every month I have to pay a rent.
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 day I am forced to listen my neighbours' quarrels. And I cannot change them. At least I can change a residence. In conclusion, I am sure I give a lot of reasons why living in a building is better than living in a residence. Good luck for looking your own place to live.
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