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SOME Expert believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.

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Foreign
language
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 plays a vital role in our day to day life.It not only adds a skill to our
profile but
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profile, but
also
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 groom the child's overall personality. A Child becomes much more confident. Nowadays, most of the International Schools have many exchange
student
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 opportunities that a
student
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 gets while studying.
Its
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It's
 one of the golden opportunity and with prior knowledge of foreign
language
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,
child
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the child
a child
 does not face any difficulty.
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Student
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The student
A student
 should have a good communication
skills
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skill
 and that comes with practice,
that is
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 why I strongly agree that foreign
language
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 should be taught to
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student
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a student
students
the student
 in primary
school
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.
Language
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 is not a subject that could be memories, everything is achieved with hard-work and patience.It is not our mother tongue or our
first
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language
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, we need
time
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 to adapt any
language
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,
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,
and it will not be
fulfill
completed to perfection
fulfilled
 if we start learning
language
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 in secondary
school
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.
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, the students learning from primary
school
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 will get more
time
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 and it will be more beneficial for them.
In
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At
From
 the start, children are in
there
of them or themselves
their
 learning phase, they grasp more and more things happening around them. If
foreign
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a foreign language
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 is taught in primary
stage
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stage, then
then
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student
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the student
have
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has
 a good hold
on
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of
 that
language
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. Because they are learning at
very early stage
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a very early stage
 so there basics will be more clear and can have a strong foreign
language
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 communication skills in future. And as the result,
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student
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the student
students
a student
 won't be facing any difficulties because
there
of them or themselves
their
 base will be strong.
Student
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 have so much pressure in secondary
school
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 related to academic studies, sports or career that they don't get
time
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 to think about other skills.And, due to
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this
plural of "this"
these
 students are not able to devote their
time
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 in
foreign
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the foreign language
a foreign language
foreign languages
language
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 as they already have many other priority stuff lined up. Whereas, when students are in primary
school
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 they don't have much mental pressure and can learn better.
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, secondary
school
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student
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 will face much problem than primary ones, since primary once have no mental pressure. There is no age for learning new things
,
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,
you can achieve anything at any point
of
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in
life but
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life, but
 when it comes to
language
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, learning it at
early stage
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an early stage
the early stage
 is much more beneficial than learning it in later stages.
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, we should keep
foreign
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the foreign language
language
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 in primary
school
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 rather than secondary
school
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.

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