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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, advertisers are focusing more on their business products, but not on what people actually need.
Moreover they
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Moreover, they
 are making money on unnecessary goods by the power of their company by attracting customers.
This
 essay with portraits, how the companies are doing business on unwanted products.
Firstly
, the company’s advertisements shows that how well the electronic product will suit your home. Without any doubt the customer will make his/ her mind in
such
 a manner that they should bring that product to their home.
For example
, a buyer who lives in a small house doesn’t need any big screen, LED tv, but when he watches the Ads in the television he will get attracted to it and will buy.
This
 is happening in every house and becoming social status. The sales of the company are increasing drastically by giving EMI options and zero down payment. That’s why we can see a huge rush at the electronic malls.
On the other hand
, the products which we need actual will not be available on the television. The groceries which we are used regularly, that should be bought with our own knowledge. The things which we need are very economical and not expensive. Whereas it is quite opposite with the most attractive products like AC’s, Televisions, refrigerators, washing machines etc., which is not much more important than the products we need. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that I agree, the advertising companies making money from the public with the products which are much commonly used in every house.

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