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Some people believe that to be successful in a sport, natural ability is necessary while others think hard work and practice is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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As a successful personality in a
sport
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, he could be good at physic in nature and he gets involved in
practice
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 from his childhood. But, few stand against
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 opinion, hard work could help them to achieve their goal. We can have a discussion on both the points and
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 will add my own opinion,
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 we can come to a conclusion. The physical fitness in nature can encourage you to join a
sport
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, with your own interest of the specific game.
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Further it
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Further, it
 could be enriched, by regular
practice
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 and proper diet.
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, the necessary thing is your natural ability and
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, involve in a game which you got inspired, since your childhood.
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, tune yourself to achieve the goals.
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, you can reach to the international level. As an example, Raj is my friend and came from a village. He is a fast runner, upon his teacher's encouragement, he involved in the proper habit over a longer period and
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, the dream came true. Now, he is representing the Tamilnadu state in the100 meter running competition. Physical fitness with self motivation plays major role to be successful.
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, a
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 who does not have an athletic
body
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 in quality, but he follows sincere workout and proper food
practice
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. He takes longer time as compared to other category, but
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 achieves the goal. At the same time, he could not compete with the naturally fit
person
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, since his
body
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 supports a lot. Obese
body
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,
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, could not involve in international level
sport
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, because his
body
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 does not support in nature.
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 could be the disadvantages over other people. In my opinion, naturally fit
person
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 can acquire a position as a dominant sports personality, over the
person
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, who is a hard worker, but have health issues. At
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, as a main point to be successful in a
sport
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, natural ability is necessary than hard work and
practice
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.
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