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technology today such as mobile phones is reducing social interaction. do you agree or disagree.

#technology #phones #interaction
It is irrefutable that
technology
 has been improved in the
last
 few decades for the betterment of society. Some gadgets,
however
, are believed to be having more
demits
make a depression into
dents
 than merits. Mobile phone being considered
one
 of them has impacted our social life in many ways. I,
however
, disagree that our social interaction is reduced due to
cellphones
Suggestion
cell phones
. In the following paragraphs, I will present arguments in support of my answer.
First
 and foremost benefit of mobile phones is that they enable us to contact our near and dear
one
's from anywhere in the world and at
anytime
Suggestion
any time
. The invention of
phones
Suggestion
the phones
 was to overcome difficulties caused by conventional methods of communication
such
 as posts and telegrams. These ways of passing messages used to take much
time
 and delay in reaching message at destination results in loss of its significance.
Secondly
, many social networking websites and applications
such
 as
facebook
Suggestion
Facebook
,
whatsapp
,
Accept space
,
twitter helps us widen our friend circle. We
also
 stay in touch with our school and college friends and keep getting updates on what is happening in
one
's life. Indeed, people are not as
socialable
capable of being scaled; possible to scale
scalable
 as they used to be but the main reason for
this
 trend is our work schedule due to which we do not get enough
time
 to spend with others. People who claim that
technology
 is responsible for the present situation believe that mobile phones consume most of the
time
 of people. After returning from work or college, people remain glued to their mobile or laptop screens. Their feeling is
also
 not wrong as some people use mobile phones extensively and forget about everything
,
Accept space
,
 even their
familis
a social unit living together
families
. Family members should take responsibility to persuade their loved
one
's to spend
time
. It is commonly said that a family that eats together and prays together, stays together. All in all, the access to
technology
 actually helps man
to become
Suggestion
become
 more
socialable
inclined to or conducive to companionship with others
sociable
.
Thus
 saying that it is impacting our social life is not a correct statement to agree on.
Although
, excessive use of
technology
 will have detrimental effects for sure.
Thus everyone
Accept comma addition
Thus, everyone
 should know how to divide their
time
 and use it effectively.

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