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For Centuries, Important Parts Of Education Have Remained Such As Reading, Writing And Maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skills be made as fourth skill to the list. To what extent do you agree?

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Reading, writing and math talents are being considered as the primary skills of
education
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 for over 100 years, but with the The invention of computers, some people believe that
computer
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education
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 ought be added to the primary
skill
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 sets. In my opinion, I agree that
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 discipline should be made as the mandatory subject
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 to the primary skills. A good reason to add
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computer subject
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a computer subject
 is that it dominates almost all the fields, especially in the space industry, banking Industry and health care industry.
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, an employer requires
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 talent as the prominent talent, even for an entry level job.
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, computers are getting used in a small supermarket to highly advanced space centres. So, without
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 expertise, it is difficult for any job seekers get a job in the market. Another good reason to have
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skill
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 is the evolution of globalization.
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 of it, all the study materials from top-class schools Are available online. In order to access those information and to
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 explore it, one should have a good
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skill
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.
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, a lot of online degree courses are available from international universities which a student can
complete
compete for something; engage in a contest; measure oneself against others
compete
 quite easily when he knows about
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.
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, in higher
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, most of the subjects are now
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 based, and it requires basic to advanced level of
computer
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skill
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. If a student fails to have
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skill
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 in his
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,
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 it is extremely hard for him to compete.
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, in future there may be a new way of
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education
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educating
 which entails no
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 and
instead
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 the
school
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 board loads all the study materials as well as the teaching video online. So, having
computer
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 discipline is a must
skill
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 for students. In conclusion, computers play a huge role in almost every single field, and primary skills are not sufficient for one to succeed in a career.
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, it is Essential to add
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skill
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 as one of the must learn
skill
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 in
school
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 curriculum.
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