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It is believed that women are more suited to child-rearing than men. What is your opinion on this issue?

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I agree, female gender have proven to be superior to
male gender
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the male gender
 in raising a
child
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. My essay would throw light upon the various qualities that puts them in a more commanding position in
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 regard.
Mother
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The mother
 carries her
child
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 for nine months and a strong bond is established pre-birth itself both physically and mentally. Women
also
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 cater to the basic needs of the
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child strengthening
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child, strengthening
 their connection.
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, nature has deprived men of
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 privilege. So, the
child
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-rearing years being early stages of growth, are handled better by women than men.
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, in the
first
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 three months of a
child
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’s growth, mother is instinctively attuned to recognizing the signs of hunger or sleep in the
child
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 as against her father. God has created women to be more patient and empathetic towards others.
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 is
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 augmented by the hormones developed in her body during
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child birth
the parturition process in human beings; having a baby; the process of giving birth to a child
childbirth
 to
helps
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help
 her in the role of care-giver.
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 characteristic of women, puts them a step ahead of men when dealing with children in their early stages. Men can develop these traits only from experience gathered over the years.
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, it is often seen that a mother tries to soothe her
child
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 by trying to understand the underlying reason for tantrums, whereas, the father would try to silence the kid through admonition. It is evident that females have the added advantage of their feminine attributes in raising children as against their counterparts. But in today’s world men should overcome their handicaps to share the responsibilities of their partners in raising a
child
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • child-rearing
  • caregiver
  • social constructs
  • nurturing
  • gender roles
  • stereotypes
  • paternity leave
  • co-parenting
  • development
  • economic pressures
  • primary caregiver
  • gender biases
  • fluidity of roles
  • societal norms
  • inherent differences
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