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It is said that people’s life now is becoming more and more stressful. What are the causes and how to solve it?

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Recently, it has been noticed that people undergo various kinds of
stress
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stress, such
such
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 as emotional
stress
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, physical
stress
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 and educational
stress
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 which now affect their personal lifes.
The
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
remedies will be stated in the passag
ed.
the act of passing from one state or place to the next
passage
 To start with, the causes of
stress
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 can't be over emphasized.
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, emotional
stress
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 is one effect which can be due to death
of lo
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the death
ved ones.
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, the breadwinner of a family died l
eaving the w
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died, leaving
ife and 3kids.
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,Loss
o
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f job is
an
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a job
other point of emotional
stress
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 a financially buoyant individual who suddenly lost his or her job.
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,chron
i
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,
c illness
such
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 as diabetes and Heart disease are major causes of emotional
stress
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.
Secondly
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, physical
stress
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stress, such
such
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 as working long hours and working under dangerous condition as negative effects on the physical appearance of
such
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 individuals.
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, examination and poor time management is ano
th
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are
er point of educational
stress
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.
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, the solution to
this
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 effect will be listed below.
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,emoti
o
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,
nal comfort should be given to those who lost their loved ones,
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, people should be encouraged to observe break and
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o work under a fav
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also work under
ourable condition.
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, studen
t shoul
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the student
d be though
t on ho
impart skills or knowledge to
taught
w to manage their time. To sum up,
stress
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 has a negative impact on people's life and can be dangerous if not properly controlled.

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