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Many students take part-time jobs whilst studying in a university. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Today, a number of students get part-time
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 while going to university. In
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 essay, I will discuss both upsides and downsides of being employed in a part-time job, including the ideas how adolescents can obtain
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 experience beforehand and the problems with maintaining
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-life balance. Overall, I think the benefits outweigh drawbacks. On the plus side, by working part-time, students can get a multitude of benefits.
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 of all, they can earn enough income to support themselves or their family. Not only
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 early employment can help adolescents to obtain money management skills and be financially aware from a very young age.
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, it could be easier for them to avoid debts in the future.
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, students can acquire
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 experience which will add credibility to their CV. In most cases, employers hire applicants who have previous
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 experience, as these students have already had knowledge of workplace ethics and company culture, it will be quite beneficial for them to get an occupation in the long-term. One obvious negative side of working on a part-time basis is that students ‘coursework can be distracted because of workload. They might find it challenging to tackle difficult subjects as well as manage their time.
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, they cannot spend enough time studying or doing leisure activities.
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, they can face health problems, particularly, fatigue due to heavy amount of
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. By the way of example, according to a survey, students who are part-time employees reported that they usually were suffering from extreme tiredness which is a common disadvantage of working part-time. To conclude, weighing up both sides of the argument,
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 part-time student workers have some minor difficulties in balancing
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 and study, the fact that the advantages of part-time working are more predominant and worthwhile.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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