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Some people believe that restoration of old buildings costs too much, we should demolish them and build new ones instead To what extend do you agree or disagree

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The number of old buildings has been increasing gradually in
contemporary world
Suggestion
the contemporary world
. Some people believe in order to keep those buildings, too much money should be spent, so they should be replaced by new buildings
instead
.
However
, I dispute
this
 theory. It will be proven by
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
 how necessary it is to keep old buildings and considering the economical aspect of repairing them. The buildings that are constructed in an urban or rural area show the history and the culture of that area. Tourists are so interested in visiting cities which have rich backgrounds and they would pay to enter old houses to take a journey to the past and be familiar with the culture. If a city lacks
this
 type of building, people will not be able to review their history by walking in their city.
Thus
, those buildings, which might be known as landmarks in the future, must not be replaced with newer ones and it is repairing them which should be invested
on
Suggestion
in
.
Furthermore
, it is obvious that renovating a building
costs
Suggestion
cost
 less than erecting it from scratch. More money should be paid for costs
such
 as
labors
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labours
labour
, designers, civil engineers and more material
is needed
Suggestion
are needed
. Logically, the cost of restoration is much less than rebuilding the whole construction. After
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
this
, it is clear that old buildings should be saved by repairing. Following the
analyzation
The act of analyzing, or separating into constituent parts; analysis
analysation
 of the important part that old buildings play in culture and history of an area as well as
lower final cost
Suggestion
the lower final cost
 of restoring an old building in comparison with pulling down and making another one, it is evident that
cost
Suggestion
the cost
 of renovating a building is definitely less than erecting it and replacing it with another building is frowned upon. It is expected that with consistency of urban planners and designers, the government will introduce a law in order to protect old buildings in a more effective way.
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