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Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is known that environmental problems are a world problem that people and
authority
 have to solve, but who really have the power to make a great change? In
this
 essay I will provide different points of view for each actor,
authority
 and individuals. People think that the
authority
 has the liability to solve all environmental problems because they are our guardians, but
that is
 not true. The
authority
 is responsible for managing public resources and for protecting our rights, as well as providing education, health and shelter. They
also
 make campaigns to promote environmental cares, but what happen when individuals don't listen to them and start to making fire in forbidden areas like parks and the woods? Obviously is going to have repercussions
in
Suggestion
on
 the
environment
 and it will damage the ecosystem. In
this
 case the government can punish those who go against the
environment
, but they don't have the capability to stop them so
they
Suggestion
They
 cannot damage the
environment
 anymore.
On the other hand
, many documentaries have shown the contamination that individual has made in the ocean, parks and protected areas.
This
 contamination is made of cans, plastic, cigarettes and more, so why the government has to be responsible about our actions? People have to be conscious about the environmental problems, they have to contribute not littering, and protecting the nature.
This
 way the pollution will be minimized and it will generate a better place to leave. In conclusion, governments provide information and teach citizens to protect the
environment
, but the true responsibility lies in each person who need to take care of our planet and take
this
 information to make the world a better place to leave.

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