A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not manage correctly. Describe the merits and demerits of tourism in the world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweigh it's drawbacks.

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past few decades

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the past few decades

tourism

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has contributed significantly to economic

development especially

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development, especially

in lower- middle income countries.

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there are

lot

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lots

advantages like

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advantages, like

positive cultural exchange and exposure to

latest technology

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the latest technology

latest technologies

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tourism

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toured

as one of the main source of income, there are

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disadvantages that cannot be ignored.

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, in my opinion the advantages of including

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as one of the major

source

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sources

of income outweighs the disadvantages that can easily be corrected.

Tourism

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is a boon to any

country

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which look forward for

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economic development.

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not only brings in

lot

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a lot

lots

of foreign money, but

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introduces the

localites

a surrounding or nearby region

localities

to a different culture and norms.

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cultural exchange clearly contributes to

development

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the development

of open

mindedness

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attitude

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the attitude

of the population exposed.

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Government

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the Government

will invest more into traditional buildings and cultural aspects in the process of making the

country

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more attractive to the tourists.

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will not only result in increased tourists

flow but

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flow, but

even the local people will get awareness about traditional areas and its significance in the history.

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in addition

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, having

more tourist

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a more tourist

will introduce the

country

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to more technologies that can be adapted and used locally.

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, there are

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few disadvantages

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a few disadvantages

like over crowding and

risk

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the risk

of damage when the tourist flow increases to a particular spot.

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the Indian

express

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expresses

published on 22

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July 2019 stated that there were several pencil and pen marks spotted on the walls of Taj Mahal and few tourists were held responsible for the same.

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The majority

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damages are caused when there is

over crowding

cause to crowd together too much

overcrowding

and lack of proper vigilance.

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such

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incidents are rare and undertaking proper precautionary measures can prevent

such

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incidences to a large extend. In

conclusion I

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conclusion, I

strongly believe that

tourism

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is a boon for economic growth and

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should be promoted as far as possible.

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there are few disadvantages, the benefits that a

country

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receives as part of

tourism

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outweighs the disadvantages. Through

propoer

marked by suitability or rightness or appropriateness

proper

vigilance and certain precautionary measures, the disadvantages can be easily sorted out

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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not manage correctly. Describe the merits and demerits of tourism in the world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweigh it's drawbacks.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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