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some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a foundation subject whether or not it is used later in life. Discuss both sides

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Mathematics is one of the basic
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subject
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subjects
 which taught at
school
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 from
begining
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the beginning
beginning
. Some parents thought that
this
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subject
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 is very difficult and should not be taught at
school
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 while
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 said that it should be a foundation
subject
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,
does'nt
does not
doesn't
 matter students used
this
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 later in
life
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 or not. According to statement both
view
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views
 are valid in their own.
First
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 of all, mathematics is the root of any
subject
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 in the
filed
catch or pick up (balls) in baseball or cricket
field
 of study and practical
life
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. It
is related
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relates
 to science subjects,
for
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example physics
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example, physics
, statistics etc. If we talk
about buisness it
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about business, it
about business it
palys
participate in games or sport
plays
pays
 a vital role in
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 field. Practical
life
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 is very important as it reflects future. If a person works in a
bank he
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bank, he
 should be perfect in maths.
Similarly
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, if a person is accountant or charted account in these
fileds
record in a public office or in a court of law
files
fields
fluids
 maths plays role of backbone.
Secondly
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, it should be taught at
school
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 from childhood, because a
children
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child
 has a blank mind whatever we teach them they will pick so quickly. So when they learn from
strating
a turn to be a starter (in a game at the beginning)
starting
 point
thet
pointing out something
that
they
 will pick
this
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 as fast as a young child. As mentioned above, it is
root
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the root
a root
 of any
subject
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 so no one can deny its value of teaching at
school
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.
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, other people believe that it should remain the foundation
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subject whether
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subject, whether
 or not it is used in later
life
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. They are correct in their own way. It is not
necessory we
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necessary, we
necessary we
necessarily we
 use maths in our practical
life
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 or
not but
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not, but
 it should be a basic element and golden
subject
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 throughout the education
backgroundd
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background d
. In conclusion, the facts and figures mentioned
above despite
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above, despite
 having some drawbacks of mathematics, the benefits of taught at
school
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 are too great to ignore. Nobody can regret to have a mathematics in their daily
life
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 and it is the best choice of
subject
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 to study.
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