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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Despite educating the past, there are those who say that it is not valuable for citizens far comprehension of
living
the act of departing
leaving
 the modern world. It
is partially agree
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is partially agreed
 that studying the
history past
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history, past
 can advantageous to us.
This
 essay will discuss both views and support why learning the historical event should relate to in the our present time.
Nowadays most
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Nowadays, most
 people are only able to learn about fundamental throughout the history since there are no way that they could turn back time to observe that specific
events
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event
. It properly contains the cultural traditions which notice people about their roots. Because of oversea tradition, it frequently impacts on our actions and visions. A good example for
this
 is dressing clothes, people should regard to the
own
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ownership
 symbolics.
This
 action displays the country’s image that can attract the foreigners for visiting and becoming tourist attractions.
On the other hand
, there are some arguments why receiving historical data
has
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have
 without value for modernised people to live. Some opponents argue that history
make
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makes
 people more backwardness. Learning the new things possibly take various benefits, particularly IT. If the public administration addicted to the past, the public transportations,
such
 as subway, and
skytrain
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Skytrain
 seem to be underdeveloped for passengers to use effectively. In conclusion, studying the past should not be the main reason for people to live in the present era because in
this
 case people would not motivate to think about the
modernised
an artist who makes a deliberate break with previous styles
modernist
 era,
although
 it
also
 has taken skip the own cultures and ancestors.
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