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More and more schools allow fast-food restaurants to sell their products to their students. Is it a positive or negative development? Education

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Nowadays there seems to be an increasing ubiquity of fast
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 stores on campus. While I agree that it can bring some convenience to students and schools, I am more convinced of the problems
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 development leads to. On the one hand, having fast
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 stores on campus can offer an immediate solution to some pressing needs. For starters, the
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 canteen is often found to be crowded with students and usually fails to meet the demand. Having fast
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 stores in
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 offers students an alternative to having their meals where the environment is cleaner and more comfortable. Most importantly, they would not have to spend a long time waiting in line. After all, fast
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 is known for its efficiency. Apart from that, the
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 safety can be more guaranteed. The catering service of the
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 is usually subcontracted to other companies which may not be qualified. And it is often heard in the news that
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 canteens are held accountable for
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 poisoning among students.
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 chains are more attentive to those issues as they are constantly supervised and mostly have a reputation to uphold.
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, those benefits would pale in significance when compared to the potential risks. Having easy access to fast
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 poses a serious threat to students’ health. It is acknowledged that fast
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 can contribute to a higher chance of heart disease and high blood sugar, let alone obese. Should students constantly replace meals with hamburgers and fries, their health condition would inevitably be undermined. Apart from that, schools should be a place that focuses on educating the
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 generation as opposed to commercial profits. Introducing fast
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 restaurants into education institutes would exert a negative impact on their public images, and gravely contradicts the academic atmosphere within the campus. In conclusion,
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 fast
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 stores can be of help in some areas, it is imperative to realize the detrimental influence they have on students’ health and
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 image.
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