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Team activities can teach more skills for life than those activities ,which are played alone .To what exteny do you agree or disagree .

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Every incident in a
person
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’s life can teach him something. Some people opine that group activities can teach you more lessons than the individual activities. I believe that each aspect has its own essence and
both
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 can be a progressive learning experience and myriads of things can be learned from
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 types of activities. On the one hand,
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 games
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 as basketball and football can help in improving the behavioural traits
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 as being compassionate for others. It helps in becoming sympathetic towards others players because each player is entitled to share everything with the other player.
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, everyone, subconsciously feels the responsibility towards each other.
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, owing to the fact that cricket is a
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 sport and everyone’s best performance is mandatory for a win, everyone helps each other to improve.
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, everyone grows together.
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, individuals played games
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 as tennis and badminton makes a
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 a responsible player.
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 is because winning or losing
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 depends on an individual and no blame games could be played, and
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, a
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 learns to accept himself and how to take responsibility of his performance and it’s result.
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, Rodger Feeder’s success credits cannot be shared with anyone and the result of each of his game depends on his strategies and no one else.
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, in
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 games
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 as Cricket, winning and losing depends on
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team's performance
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the team's performance
 and not individual,
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 it is easy to blame others for a loss, but
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 does not teach a
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 how to take responsibility for the loss. In conclusion, each type of sport has its own benefit
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 as group sports teaches how to care of your teammates and individual sports can make you a more responsible
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.
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, each aspect has its own value and
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 are essential.

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