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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. To what extent do you agree? You should write at least 250 words.

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A Film star, a political leader and the sports player are one of the people, who are always in the limelight. It surely affects themselves and their children too, many people believe that it is true, while few others don't agree. In my opinion, as a celebrity he always under the media coverage, which
also
 impacts on their children and causes a negative effect.
To begin
 with, celebrity children would be always under the focus or public attention while in the school or college and it affects their privacy. If they visit a mall or the public park, there could be chance of crowd gathering, which put them in
a
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an
 embarrassed situation. As an example, Sachin Tendulkar is a well known cricket player in India and his family members too. His son Rajeev, who was 16, visiting a mall and suddenly the mall went completely crowded and the situation was out of control. He shouted at everyone and the atmosphere turned against him. Later, it was published in the media too, concerning his behaviour. It is one the negative effect, to be a son or daughter of the famous personality.
On the other hand
, it gives us pleasure and internal joy, when the whole crowd gives attention
on
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to
 you.
Firstly
, wherever you go, you will get priority and
secondly
, the people respect you (some people even crazy about you) and
finally
 it is a talent of the individual, to keep them always in the limelight. Both the side have valuable points and in my opinion, I could not agree with the statement. It has negative points and it has to be accepted and at the time, advantages overcome, which means to be a son / daughter of a celebrity, considered as a lucky person. He gets attention from other people,
such
 as school teacher, college lecturer and it provides a better confidence level.

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