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In Some Areas Of The US Teenagers Are Not Allowed To Be Out Of Doors After a Particular Time At Night | Band 9 IELTS Essay Sample

We are living in a world with diverse culture and politics, some area in the US has
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a curfew
 imposed on their citizens. In
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 article, I will explain the reason. The
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 imposed a
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 on their youth due to the environment of the local community. There is no restriction for American adults to have a gun and it increases the potential danger in society. It is dangerous for a lonely child to walk on the street in the middle of the night. In order to protect teenagers ' safety, the
government
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 imposed a
curfew
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 that they can only go out when they are accompanied by an adult. Another reason for
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 is for movement restriction.
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, there was a news report by Chicago time that a group of teenagers paints a giant painting on the city hall wall overnight. Even though the painting itself shows no hate or
violence it
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violence, it
 damages the city's outlook and the
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 has to repaint the wall to cover the artwork. To prevent the incident happen again, the
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 imposes a
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 on its youth. It is the most effective way for the
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 to prevent property
damage but
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damage, but
 it
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 interferes with people's life. I believe
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 is the most effective way for
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 to achieve its
goals whether
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goals, whether
 the goal is public safety or prevent property damage and so on. But it affects teenagers' right to go out and restrict their freedom to choose what they want.
Government
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 should put more attention to other aspects like increasing police force or educate teenage more about the consequence to go out at night than put
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.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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