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Many people work long hours, leaving little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

#people #work #hours #time #leisure #activities #situation
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 issue of overtime at the workplace has become a much discussed topic in recent years. Some feel that there ex
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 plethora of drawbacks due to a lack of relaxation. I am of the opinion that the cons outweigh the pros. In the following paragraphs, I WILL EXPLORE THE RATIONALE FOR BOTH BELIEFS, AS WELL AS PROFFER JUSTIFICATION FOR MY OWN VIEWPOINT. Regarding those who see more disadvantages to sp
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, there are many reasons. It is not as beneficial as it may seem to have a lot of overtime, because it means you will pay more taxes,
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 losing money.
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, when you
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 long hours, you see your family only on weekends, when you don't have the strength to do anything. More specifically, you start to suffer from anxiety because you think about your duty and working tasks. In fact, a recent survey in the Economist journal showed that 60% of people working
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, I firmly believe that spending
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 for leisure is a necessity for your well being. When you
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 less, you can spend
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 on things that bring you joy. You can explore parks in your city with your family, go to the cinema, and
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 go to the gym and
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 on your body.
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, less
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 means more
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 with family. My acquaintance is a shining example. With the right
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 management, he has achieved excellent results. Not only can he
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 on activities and with his family. In sum, I maintain that if you want to live a long and happy life, you should
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 less and spend more
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 on the things you gravitate towards.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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