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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it

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I am writing
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 letter to express my interest about work in the head office for
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 six months. I would like to mention that I have been efficiently developed my skill according to the role which I have done
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 few years.
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, I would prefer to learn more about the company that I have worked and I would like to work with
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 and different working
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, I would like to train my assistant
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 tasks which I have done as well as me.
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, she has a wide knowledge and ability to manage tasks
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related to my position.
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, I granted her to complete my job
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while I am
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away
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, she can have my advice at any time
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required.
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, I would like to request that if you can help me to arrange my paperwork which
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 related to my transfer to the head office because it would be a great help for me.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional development
  • global operations
  • cross-functional
  • remote work
  • progress updates
  • logistical arrangements
  • cultural exchange
  • continuity plan
  • enhance my skillset
  • broaden my horizons
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