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It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. Do you agree or disagree?

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Studying in college is one of the essential parts of our lives and backbone to improve our knowledge and skills especially during the learning period. Some people suggest that children should live in an inn that would give various benefits and it is extremely encouraging them. Other opposed that living with the family will guide them to become a proper person. The following paragraphs will discuss both views comprehensively. The current society has completely changed into the modern technique. After higher secondary, most pupils are desired to study in
an
Suggestion
a
 tavern for various reasons. The travelling time to home would be reduced and even at exam time, it would be helpful for them to do a group study. Adolescence from far the area has major issues with transportation and the accommodation even hard to find near an urban area, the possible way to study at university is staying at the hostel.
For example
, if the student lived in a rural region, it would be harder him/her to travel to college, they could do to stay at the hostel for reducing the time as well as the transportation charges.
On the contrary
, other people might think that if pupil stay at home will help to control them in various manners. It shows the explicit direction and reduces the wrong commitments as smoking, drinking alcohol, addicting to drugs soon.
For example
, parents should concern about their children behaviour and attitude after admitting them into the motel, some parents have a single child so they have more concern about their child's future whether he/she has interfered with wrong commitment while enjoying fun with friends. In conclusion, it is good to stay at
home
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home, although
although
 it will be better if the pupil stays in
tavern
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the tavern
 to enduring the difficulties, it would be hard for him/her to understand the meaning of life. So, in my opinion, I strongly agree that pupils who live in the hostel will experience more merits and learn about life from a different perspective.

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