Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions to what they do.

Nowadays, there is a proliferation of discussions about the freedom of
artists
' performances. Some people consider that
artists
must be given
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independence to express their competency.
Nonetheless
, several communities suggest that the
government
makes surveillance for
artists
' expression.
However
, I personally do not entirely agree with
this
, and I will explain why.
Firstly
, the restriction of liberation from creator-content will kill their creativity. It can be explained that the imagination can not be limited by the rules because if thought following the regulations, it will lose self-unique.
For instance
, Indonesia's
government
will create a direction for YouTubers' content, and many YouTubers
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to will limit their creativity.
As a result
, the
government
is reconsidering the implementation of that regulation.
Secondly
, the limitation of creativity decreases the originality of the content made. The reason for
this
is that when the
artists
perform the best performance in their film, it can be cut or censored by the state's regulator, considering that they are not following the laws.
For example
, many movies in Indonesia are cropped and edited by the movie's controller, which is provided by Indonesia country.
Consequently
, the spectators can not watch the whole film made by moviemakers.
To conclude
, I strongly disagree with the controls for the
artists
' performances. It is
due to
some bases,
such
as the imagination can be destroyed by the limitations of the rules, and it
also
reduces the genuineness of the movie created by the creator.
Therefore
, it is recommended that the
government
does not restrict artist appearances.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Freedom of expression
  • Censorship
  • Artistic integrity
  • Cultural identity
  • Social responsibility
  • Public order
  • Discrimination
  • Hate speech
  • Self-regulation
  • Government intervention
  • Vulnerable groups
  • Creativity
  • Democracy
  • Fundamental right
  • Moral obligation
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