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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. Others, however, believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Why? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays, there is an argument among the people where many have the opinion that the parents should not be hurried to do
admission
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the admission
 of their
child
 in the schools,
however
, few of the people have the contrast view where they are in support of starting education of the
childeren
a young person of either sex
children
 at
early
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an early age
age
. I think it’s better for the
child
 to start schooling at
earlist possible
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the earliest possible age
earliest possible age
age
 because it will be an added advantage in the future for carrier growth. Primarily, in many countries around the world where to
obtained
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obtain
 a government
jobs
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job
their
in or at that place
there
 is
certian
definite but not specified or identified
certain
 criteria to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
, according to that it is essential for the applicant to have
atlest
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at lest
 graduation degree with
a
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an
age
 limit of 22 years. Eventually, to come under
such
 requirement a candidate should start his or her education at the young
age
instead
 of delaying which later cost them in loosing lifetime
carrier
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
 opportunity.
For example
, one
such
 case which I witnessed is one of my friends who are an engineering graduate which was completed at the of 24 years, applied for government
job but
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job, but
 sadly got rejected due to
age
 limit
inspite
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in spite
 of having good merit points. To not to miss
such
 offers in
life it
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life, it
 is imperative for the parents to keep future aspects in mind while
doing
the act that results in something coming to be
making
 admission of their kids.
In addition
, if a
child
spend
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spends
 6 to 7 initial years of their life’s at home without going school will make them a
homesick which
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homesick, which
subsequently
 cause a problem for parents to send them school later. To avoid
such
 unpleasent situation they
shoul
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children
the child
d not delay in sending to shcool to their childeren’s In conclusion, school is the place where
child
 learn to grow their skills which are key to develop a prosperous future for them so its a duty of the parents not

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