Many people join distance-learning programmes (study material, post, TV, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. Do you agree or disagree?

Education system
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The education system
has upgraded a lot in
technological era
Suggestion
a technological era
the technological era
, where numerous courses are available to do online as per students
convient
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
time
and place.
However
, many people have
contrast
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contrasted
view, as they believe that the standards of education is not as similar as physical learning at the institutions. In my opinion, digital programmes are the advance form of educational system which give
presice understanding
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a precise understanding
precise understanding
prosaic understanding
of
concep
an abstract or general idea inferred or derived from specific instances
concept
with 3 d images and videos. Primarily, currently there are many universities around the globe who are offering the various programmes online which provide opportunity
to
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for
students to pursue higher education irrespective of
time
and place.
For example
, a professional who are
woking
actively engaged in paid work
working
walking
in MNC’s 5 days a week who cannot
attented
be present at (meetings, church services, university), etc.
attend
attended
the college regularly can opt the online course during weekends and
lesiure
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
time which
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time, which
eventully
after an unspecified period of time or an especially long delay
eventually
boost his future by
helps
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helping
him in promoting
his position in in
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his position in
his company.
Moreover
, some students are fond
to
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of
study in abroad,
However
, they can’t go to other countries due to multiple reasons can
also
get
benefit
Suggestion
benefits
from online programmes. In additions, the programmes which was available to study online provide material on their website which was available for students anytime when
they
of them or themselves
their
wishes to see.
Furthermore
, they provide highly advanced study material which contain multimedia images, videos
etc which
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etc., which
etc. which
give
Suggestion
gives
in-depth knowledge about
subject
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the subject
a subject
,
subsequently
, which remain in
minds
Suggestion
the minds
of the students for
longer period
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a long period
long period
long periods
to
time
. In
conlusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, the world are at modern age where technology has become
imperative part
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an imperative part
of human life, under
such
circumstances it
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circumstances, it
is essential for the education system
to
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with
emphasis more on latest digital method of learning which encourage
pupil
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the pupil
pupils
a pupil
to take
high level
Suggestion
a high level
high levels
of courses as per their flexibility and help them to understand the
concep
an abstract or general idea inferred or derived from specific instances
concept
clearly.
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  • flexibility
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • independence
  • communication
  • interaction
  • academic resources
  • extracurricular activities
  • hands-on experience
  • peer support
  • time management
  • procrastination
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