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A friend of yours is thinking of going to a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter: &Explain why you think your friend would enjoy camping holiday. &Describe some possible disadvantages. &Say whether you would like to go on camping with your friend this summer.

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Dear Brian, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing about the question you asked about the camping holiday. I believe you would definitely enjoy the camping holiday because you are an adventurous person, and you can do a lot of exciting activities there. You can go for fishing, mountain climbing and skiing. As I know that you are passionate about high-risk sports, I think it would be one of your best memories.
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, you may face some problems there.
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, sleeping in a tent is quite inconvenient.
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, the place is full of insects, so sometimes it would be a bit irritating. Having said that, I think you can cope with these problems really well.
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, I want to share with you some good news. My manager told me that I am entitled to go on a summer holiday, so I can accompany you on your trip. Please let me know if you still want to go on
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 trip. Best regards, Arthur

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task achievement
Your letter does an excellent job of responding to all parts of the task. Well done! For an even higher score, you could provide a bit more detail or examples about the disadvantages of camping, such as the challenges of cooking outdoors or the unpredictability of weather conditions.
coherence cohesion
Your letter is well-organized and easy to follow. To improve further, consider using more transitional phrases to enhance the flow between different parts of the letter.
task achievement
Your response effectively addresses each bullet point required by the task: explaining why your friend would enjoy camping, describing some disadvantages, and stating your interest in joining the trip.
task achievement
Your letter has a friendly, helpful tone, which is entirely suitable for writing to a friend and well-suited for the task.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph clearly presents a single idea, which helps to keep the letter well-organized.
coherence cohesion
Your opening and closing are appropriate and friendly, which helps to set the right tone for the letter.
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