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The chart below shows the value of one country's export in various cayegories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage changes in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's export in various cayegories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage changes in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar chart illustrates the export earnings of different sectors of one country between 2015 and 2016.
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 the table highlights the variation in the demand
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 these items in comparison
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 these two years.
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petroleum products earned more money, among others and the biggest increment
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 industry.
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, the largest drop shown in the values of Gems and Jewellery and the lowest export earning was a textile. An analysis of the data shows, both
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engineered and petroleum goods accounted for
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sales of utmost 58 and 60 billion dollars, respectively, and it became stable at 62 million dollars for both categories in 2016.
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, agriculture items had earned slightly above
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30 billion dollars in these adjacent years
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, the highest rise of 15.24% have shown in
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 textile department and the largest decline of 5.18 %
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 brought in Gems and Jewellery.
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minor changes came in the values of agricultural products, which was 0.81 %.
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