One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays, with the help of

technology medical

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technology, medical

system has immensely grown where it developed latest equipment and medicines which enhance the life span of a human begin.

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, some people have the contrast view that

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improvisation

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also increase

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also increases

the cost of a

treatment

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of old age

patients which

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patients, which

eventually

effect

have an effect upon

affect

the

health

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care

managment

the act of managing something

management

of young peoples. Life is a gift of a god and every person

have

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has

a desire to live longer. With the efforts of scientist the medical facilities had improved

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extend that, now it’s possible to increase the

life time

the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)

lifetime

of a human by providing proper

treatment

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, in a olden days people enduring from stomach diseases

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are

difficult to treat due to lack of diagnosis,

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, today with

help

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the help

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ultrasound

machine we can see in-depth

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expresses motion to a point on, or within, something

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the stomach and identify the disease which

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cure with

best possible

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the best possible treatment

treatment

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consequently

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Such

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advancment

encouragement of the progress or growth or acceptance of something

advancement

keeps the man or women healthy and live longer. Old people are the

presious

characterized by feeling or showing fond affection for

precious

precise

asset of the country which play a vital role in increasing productivity with their experience and

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proves to be a great mentor for young working professionals. On the other side,

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advancment

encouragement of the progress or growth or acceptance of something

advancement

advancements

health

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care system cost more which basically effecting by reducing the budget of

treatment

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which spend on

young

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the younger

generation.

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government issue

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the government issues

government issues

a limited amount of money for

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care out of which major amount is dumping on keeping old

peole

(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively

people

alive while the youth suffers from

health

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problesm

a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved

problems

problem

. In conclusion,

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there is certain drawbacks of latest technology in medical

system but

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system, but

benefits out ways the demerits as old people are the

tresure

accumulated wealth in the form of money or jewels etc.

treasure

treasures

treasurer

of the society If they live long life it

ultimatly

as the end result of a succession or process

ultimately

yield advantages to us.

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